The line graph compares percentage of tourists to England who visited attractions over a period of 30years.

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the percentage

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of

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to England who visited attractions over a period of

30years

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30 years

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,at the beginning of the year,the festival and the pavilion were among the first.Compared to the two older

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,the pier stood at the lowest level.

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of people who visited art

gallery

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rapidly,the

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of festival visits

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volatile. The first step we can see that most

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visited the festival in 1980,and

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slowly decreased to about 25% in 1995.Later it grew a little and since 2000 it has remained stable.In 1985 the percentage of

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pavilion and festival equalized.After that Pavilions popularity

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rapidly and in 1995 it peaked at about 48% but over the next 10 years,the number of

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fell rapidly.

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the indicator in 2010 the number of

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interested in

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was higher compared to the Art Gallery.