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The mans below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#show #centre #town #islip #plans #development #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The given maps illustrate Islip
town
center
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centre
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 before and after its development.
Overall
, the
town
center
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centre
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 will add
carriageway
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a carriageway
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 around it, and it will have lots of new housing after the development. The
town
center
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centre
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 is
at
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in
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 the south of
countryside
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the countryside
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 with an east-west main
road
 that has shops on
its
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apply
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both sides. Housing is located
at
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on
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 the south side of
shops
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the shops
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, and the park is
at
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on
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 the east side of
housing
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the housing
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 with a
road
 connected to it.
Lastly
, the school is
at
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in
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 the southernmost part of the
town
center
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centre
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,
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apply
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 and
also
 has a
road
lead
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leading
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 to it. After the development,
most
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the most
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 significant change is that there will
have
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be
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 a dual carriageway
surround
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surrounding
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 almost all
the
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of the
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town
center
 except
school
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the school
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 and some housing east
to
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of
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 the school.
Moreover
, the main
road
 will only allow pedestrians to walk on it, and the shop
at
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on
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 the north of
main
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the main
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road
 will become
bus
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a bus
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 station, shopping
center
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centre
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, and car park, arranged from west to east, there will
also
 have new housing at the east of it.
In addition
, there will
also
have
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be
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 new housing in between the old housing and the park.
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task achievement
Provide a more detailed summary of the main features of the maps.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the maps.
lexical resource
Use more specific and varied vocabulary.
grammatical range accuracy
Check for grammatical errors and improve sentence structure.

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