The diagram below shows a possible future means of home energy production. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The diagram below shows a possible future means of home energy production.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
The Given diagram illustrates the process of making
energy
in
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on
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domestic
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a domestic
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scale.
Overall
, there are six steps required to turn compost into
electricity
before it’s ready to use for house consumption. The steps are divided into two main stages namely producing methane
gas
and converting the
gas
into
electricity
.
To begin
with, organic domestic waste and water are collected in the underground steel tank up to
three quarter
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three-quarters
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of the capacity for the fermentation purpose.
This
process produces
gas
called methane which
then
goes to the storing container through pipes and
then
to the compressor to
compressed
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compress
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it before it is processed to be
energy
. From the compressor, the
solidify
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solidified
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gas
is transferred to and
processes
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processed
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in
combustion
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a combustion
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engine. The outcome of
this
process is mechanical
energy
. After that, the
energy
is delivered
sato
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to
generator
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a generator
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in order to convert it to
electricity
.
Afterward
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Afterwards
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, the
energy
resulted
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resulting
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in
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from
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this
step is stored in
battery
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the battery
a battery
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.
Finally
, the
electricity
ready
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is ready
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to be used for domestic
purpose
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purposes
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, electricity, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • sustainability
  • solar panels
  • energy storage
  • wind turbine
  • geothermal
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • grid
  • biomass
  • photovoltaic
  • smart meter
  • energy consumption
  • insulation
  • heat pump
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