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some university students want to learn about other subjetcs in addition to their main subjects. others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#university #students #subjetcs #addition #subjects #time #attention #qualification
It is often said that it is necessary for university
students
 to concentrate only on being
high-qualified
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 experts
on
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 their field;
while
 others claim that they should learn extra subjects apart from
principal
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 subjects of their study. From my point of view, improving other
skills
in addition
 to
main
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 subject would be crucial for
students
. Having regard to the main subjects of the
students
, it is important for all of them to extremely pay attention and give their main focus on it,
also
, they should spend most of their time
for
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studying or working hard in order to achieve
desirable
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qualification
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qualifications
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 and become experts on their field.
For instance
, if a student is studying medicine at university, he should give all his attention
on
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to
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 their studies to receive adequate knowledge during his lessons, Because
medical
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the medical
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 occupation
play
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 a virtual role in
a
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society.
Nevertheless
, it is an essential issue for all
type
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types
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 of personalities to develop their other life
skills
beside
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 their primary priority.
For example
, there are many
specialist
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specialists
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 who
are
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do
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 not succeed at social
skills
. In
fact
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fact,
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 they have
great
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a great
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 deal of problems
at
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communicating and interacting with other people.
Furthermore
, there would be vital features that everyone should own;
such
 as dedication and commitment,
or
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recognize
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 an appropriate manner to invest their money, or even
self-defense
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on
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in
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 emergency circumstances.
Thus
, in my
opinion
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opinion,
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 universities could provide more opportunities for their
students
 to expand their life
skills
in addition
 to their main topic. In conclusion, it should be an obligation for each person to learn about many aspects of their life
as well as
 their educational efforts. Regarding
to
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this
, I recommend that universities and organizations should provide more facilities for their
students
.
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