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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Ausralia in 1999

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Ausralia in 1999
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The presented table illustrates the portion of various groups of individuals Australis who resizing in
poverty
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 in 1999. From an
overall
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 perspective,
while
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 a majority of sole parents suffered from
poverty
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, a number of aged couple people had an average income and they were not highly
poverty
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. As observed in the details, 999000 people who were sole parents had a lower income compared to all
households
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 in Australia in 1999.
After
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this
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 category, 359000 single and no children families suffered from less money.
On the other hand
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, the aged couple
households
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 had 4% of
this
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poverty
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 category, and
next,
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the single person and couple family without children devoted 6% and 7% proportion of
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 research between
households
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' Australis.
Finally
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, 1837000 (11%) of
households
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 Australis involved with penury in 1999.
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, the government of Australia must pay attention to
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 matter and they try to create a lot of job opportunities for these families.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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