Some people believe that the time spent on television, video and computer games can be valuable for children. Others believe this may have negative effects on a child's development. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Some individuals perceive the

time

that

children

spend on television, video, and computer games are worth it,

whereas

others think that there are bad effects on their development. I believe

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these type of

medias

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media

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provide a creative way to learn things, but

this

indeed

affect

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their mental health

also

.

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essay will discuss both views

further

and provide a concluding view. On the one hand, entertainment industries tend to create their

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for

children

colourful and lively to keep their attention as long as they can.

This

is undeniably effective for those toddlers who watch alphabet videos on

Youtube

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for long hours

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and do not get sick of them.

Due to

this

way of presentation to them, they learn faster and

improves

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their comprehension skills.

Therefore

, if controlled moderately, the

time

they use to watch or play with these

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would greatly help in their early cognitive skills. Meanwhile,

opposing

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side cited negative effects

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debate,

such

as

children

becomes

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impatient and irritable when these entertainments are taken away from them. As they engage and focus on television or mobile phone for a long period of

time

, their minds continuously process all

information

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the information

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that they see, which exhaust them quickly.

In addition

,

this

could be addictive to

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point that parents can only console them by giving them something to watch on the phone. In conclusion, a creative way to present

contents

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to

children

could be extremely beneficial in their learning journey as a child.

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if

this

was

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utilised excessively,

this

may lead to affecting their moods and worse,

additiction

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addiction

. I believe

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proper management of

time

for

children

to spend on these

contents

will be beneficial in the long run.