With the recent improvement to the internet, people can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is it a good or bad thing. Discuss both views.

In the era of
ever-evolving
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world, the advent of
internet
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the internet
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plays a pivotal role in every
parts
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part
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of our
life
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lives
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. Now, the world is becoming a global village
due to
internet
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the internet
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. Individuals often use
internet
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the internet
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at
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for
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their own purposes. there are several pros and cons of using
internet
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the internet
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. In
this
essay, I will explore
benefits
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the benefits
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and drawbacks of it in terms of online
services
and
shoppings
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, and present arguments and examples to provide a comprehensive analysis. On
one
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hand, there are several advantages.
Firstly
,
ther
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they
emerge
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of
internet
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the internet
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enables a community who
are having
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a
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interest
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to take
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in taking
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online
services
can get
eassy
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easy
access.
For instance
, a significant number of organizations offer online
services
,
most
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and most
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of them are free of
costs
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cost
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.
This
allows
a
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people
who are unprivileged
get
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to get
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benefits from websites or apps and fosters their personal growth.
Moreover
, a large group of community
people
consider
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today,
to
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do their shopping
through
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online. They buy products from an online
market
.
Additionally
, there are a plethora of organizations which offer national and overseas items through
online
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the online
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market
. Some of these are elusive to buy in
traditional
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the traditional
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market
but
consumer
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consumers
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are able to buy
it
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them
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by through
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apply
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online,
lead
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leading
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to
reduce
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time and transportation costs.
Furthermore
, online platform alleviates the physical barrier
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who are unable to walk.
Consequently
,
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persons buy their products in
online
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the online
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market
as their own
teste
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taste
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and that makes them
feeling
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tranquil.
On the other hand
, Though online markets
has
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plenty of advantages, it is evident that most of the
times
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time
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people
receives
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receive
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poor
services
,
faulty
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and faulty
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items, from
online
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the online
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market
. Again, it is
also
noticeable that
ther
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there
are
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is
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a high
chances
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chance
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of stealing important
consumers
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consumers'
consumer's
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personal information
due to
online transactions.
As a result
,
people
find them
as
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helpless,
lead
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leading
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to
increase
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increased
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financial and
mantal
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mental
strain. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
internet
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provides not only better
services
but
also
removes
phycal contraints
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physical constraints
. There are
also
a few demerits that should be
consdered
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considered
such
as poor
services
, faulty products, and
steal
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stealing
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consumers
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consumers'
consumer's
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valuable information. Ultimately, the
emerge
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emergence
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of
internet
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the internet
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brings holistic changes in consumerism, leading towards
overall
individual and societal well-being.
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