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Title: Problem: "The Environmental Menace of Plastic Pollution" Solution: "Mitigating Plastic Pollution through Collective Action"

#title #menace #plastic #pollution #action
In the realm of
plastic
 usage, there is
a
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 undeniable fact that using disposable
plastic
products
 results in
the
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an
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 increase
of
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in
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 environmental pollution.
This
 essay will discuss the reason
of
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plastic
accumulation
 in the environment through
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the overusage
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overusage
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over usage
overuse
 of
plastice-derivative
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plastic-derivative
plasticise-derivative
products
, and how people can remove these life-threatening
obtacles
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obstacles
with
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 changing their habits on
daily
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a daily
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 basis. In today's modern life,
plastic
 pollution is a common issue among countries which could affect all people
with
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 damaging natural
inhabitats
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inhabitants
habitats
 off all creatures.
This
 problem not only threatens the balance of ecosystems
,
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 but
also
 risks human health in
a
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 long term.
For example
, single-use
plastic
products
such
 as bags and bottles, accumulating in vacant lots far away from cities, have some dangerous particles. These particles,
are
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defined as
micro-plastics
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microplastics
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,
affects
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 the DNA of all animals negatively. When enough microplastics
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are storaged
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storaged
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storage
stored
 in a DNA, its structure
has starting
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 to
change
.
Moreover
, it might
experiences
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 a mutation which
affect
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owner's
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the owner's
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 life until its
live
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 is over.
On the other hand
, humans are not the only population that
having
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 serious effects on their bodies. Most marine
creature
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creatures
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 have to digest a lot of
plastic
 waste because some countries dispose
their
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 waste
to
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 oceans.
Therefore
, a huge amount of fish species
digests
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digest
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 tons of
micro-plastics
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microplastics
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through
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 eating some part of
plastic
products
. Eventually, their organs and DNAs exhibit
the
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evidence of
plastic
accumulation
 which might
have
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change
 in the future
with
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 implementing some new habits in people's lives. Since
plastic
accumulation
 is
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an individuals'
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individuals'
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common
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problem, they should try to solve
this
 issue with collective approaches. Companies, governments, and individuals act together to reduce
plastic
 cumulation in ecosystems.
Firstly
, individuals should consider
to use
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using
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 reusable materials over single-use
plastic
products
.
Secondly
, if companies
change
 their
nondisposable
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non-disposable
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 items into environmentally friendly alternatives, it would make a great impact on society.
Finally
, governments should establish environmental laws to protect nature. These collective actions of different segments might
change
 the landscape of
plastic
accumulation
 in natural habitats. In conclusion,
plastic
accumulation
 in natural
habitat
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habitats
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 affects both human life and the environment
absolutely
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. Some consequences of the
accumulation
such
 as digesting micro-plastics would
be threaten
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threaten
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 all kinds of species;
however
, collective approaches can be beneficial to tackle
with
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this
 problem.
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