You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter – Explain why you would like the job – give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ – say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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to you in response to the post on the Australian magazine .I Have seen that you are looking for someone to
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take care

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of your child.Since
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spending time with young kids
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is the main reason why I am looking for
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opportunity.
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with my experience,during my College
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I worked as a child support worker at the Newborn daycare for almost two years .
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, I have an extensive experience as a
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.To
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, I am
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humble , calm and very
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person.Looking
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this
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makes me a potential person for
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position. As I completed my schooling I have
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a lot

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of time where I spend most of it in dog parks and
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old age
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homes. I look forward to
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from you soon, Yours sincerely Vikram

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advertisement
  • live with
  • look after
  • six-year-old child
  • suitable
  • employ
  • free time
  • Australia
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