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People today are increasingly use credit card to make monthly purchase. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #credit #card #purchase
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It is certainly true that more and more
people
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 use
credit
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cards
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 because it is the main way for monthly
purchases
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.
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 accepting that, I believe that using
credit
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cards
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 for monthly
purchases
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 is more likely to have a harmful impact. On the one hand, there are several benefits when using
credit
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cards
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 to make monthly
purchases
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. A common advantage is that we can be paid more quickly every month. Because when we use
credit
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cards
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 for
purchases
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, they can be purchased automatically. In fact, my brother often watches a movie on Netflix and all the cost is purchased through
credit
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cards
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 every month, which helps him not need to sign in the next month.
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, it can help
people
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 purchase when they don't have money they need purchase to continue using services.
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, these benefits can be outweighed by the drawbacks. One obvious disadvantage is that when using
credit
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cards
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 to make a monthly purchase, a lot of
people
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 don't know the hidden cost leads to spending more money on some services not necessary. Another negative effect is that
people
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 can have difficulties managing finance personally which lead to a lot of problems with debt.
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last
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 week, my friend realised that he lost a lot of money on subscriptions
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 as Netflix, Spotify, and iCloud and the cost was higher income for him. In conclusion,
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 there are some benefits of using
credit
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cards
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 to make monthly
purchases
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, it is obvious that can bring some risks to a
credit
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 card if
people
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 don't have knowledge about managing finances personally.
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