The chart below gives information about trends in internet used by females in the USA in 2 years
The graph
illustrated
the number of women who spent time online in the USA in the year 2000 and 2001. Generally, the rate increased slightly in 2 Wrong verb form
illustrates
years
and the younger use screens more than the older.
The 65 years
old females of this
country is
the lowest group, only 20 per Change the verb form
are
cent
in 2000 and approximately a third in 2001. In comparison, almost high
school girls used the internet in that period Correct determiner usage
all high
time
.
There was 90 per Change preposition
of time
cent
of 12 – 15 years
old girls in 2000 and still kept the same rate in 2001 while
it was a bit lower of 16 – 18 years
in 2000 and in 2001 everyone applied.
Similarly
, around 78 per cent
of women in 25 – 35 ages remained for 2 years
compared with 70 per cent
of the 36 – 45 group in the year 2000 and rose 80 per cent
of the population logged on the internet.Submitted by duyuyen18 on
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