The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five protains of fruits and vegatables per day in the UK from 2001 and 2008

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five protains of fruits and vegatables per day in the UK  from 2001 and 2008
The bar chart illustrates the number of fruits and vegetables consumed by children and adults over the period of 2001 to 2008.
Overall
, the chart provides a general increase in percentage across seven years for all the categories of people.
Firstly
, children ate the least amount of fruits and vegetables in comparison to others, particularly from 2001 to 2003 whereupon they consumed only 10%.
However
, their highest intake was in 2007 when they ate more than 25%. Even though that number dropped to 24% in 2008, it was generally higher than their past years' data. Meanwhile, for
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adults, the average percentage of men is comparatively higher than
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. The highest intake for men was in 2006 at 35%,
whereas
for
women
it was 28% that same year.
Also
,
this
data remained consistent for
women
till 2008, but for the opposite sex, the value fell to 30%. Regardless, the
women
started with 17% in 2001 and that was their lowest consumption; since
then
the data has been slowly increasing. The same applies to the men but their starting value in 2003 was 22% before it kept getting higher.
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