Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant places to live and work in. For this reason, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
Traffic jams in cities make individuals that live there have bad
quility
of life. There has been an Correct your spelling
quality
arguement
about whether private Correct your spelling
argument
viechles
should be allowed to drive in Correct your spelling
vehicles
city
centers
or not. In my Change the spelling
centres
openion
, I think Correct your spelling
opinion
private
owned Change the adjective
privately
cars
should not be banned from city
Add an article
the city
center
.
First and Change the spelling
centre
formost
, Correct your spelling
foremost
personal
owned Change the adjective
personally
cars
are a lot of people
's only transportation method. City
Correct article usage
The city
center
usually has much more job oppertinuties
than other areas, Correct your spelling
opportunities
as a result
, a lot of labors
will choose to Replace the word
labourers
work
at city
Correct article usage
the city
center
even they
live far from downtown, so their only Correct word choice
though they
tranportation
option will be driving by themselves. If they are not allowed to drive their own Correct your spelling
transportation
viechels
to their Correct your spelling
vehicles
work place
, they may Correct your spelling
workplace
force
to change their job.
Wrong verb form
be forced
Moreover
, if cars
are banned from city
Add an article
the city
center
, lots of Change the spelling
centre
car
companies
will loose
a great amount of profit. As long as Replace the word
lose
cars
are bannd
from Correct your spelling
banned
city
Add an article
the city
center
, many Change the spelling
centre
people
will not choose to perchase
a new Correct your spelling
purchase
car
, especially individuals that live near or around downtown. People
stop buying cars
that can gain profit for car
companies
, in
the end, some Correct word choice
and in
companies
may layoff
some of their employees.
Correct your spelling
lay off
On the other hand
, banned
Wrong verb form
banning
viechles
from Correct your spelling
echoes
city
Add an article
the city
center
is the most Change the spelling
centre
efficent
way to improve the excessive traffic problem. But Correct your spelling
efficient
this
method may cause a lot of side affect like I just mentioned, and there are many alternetive
Correct your spelling
alternative
solution
like Change to a plural noun
solutions
improve
public transportation system and road Wrong verb form
improving
condition
that can Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
also
solve the provlem
but Correct your spelling
problem
not
that harsh.
Add a missing verb
are not
To sum up
, if private cars
are banned from city
Correct article usage
the city
center
lots of Change the spelling
centre
people
may have hard
time Add an article
a hard
to go
to Change the verb form
going
work
, and some people
work
for Correct pronoun usage
who work
car
companies
may lose their job. Hoverever
, some Correct your spelling
However
says
that it is the most Correct subject-verb agreement
say
efficent
way, but it Correct your spelling
efficient
comes
too many side effects. Because of these reasons, I consider Verb problem
has
this
is not a wise move.Submitted by papaya on
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