Some people think that childcare centers provide the best services for children of preschool age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In
this
day and age, it is thought by some people that kindergarten is the best suitable for children
. Others, however
, hold the opinion that family members
such
as children
’s grandparents will be more useful in caring for their grandchildren. From my personal perspective, I believe that children
should be in the caring
of Replace the word
care
these
both family Correct determiner usage
apply
members
and childcare
centers
to ensure children’s
mental and physical Change noun form
their
healthy
are well-being.
Replace the word
health
To begin
with, there are quite plausible reasons for childcare
centers
Change the spelling
centres
giving
Change the verb form
to give
children
high-quality care. Firstly
, in childcare
facilities
there are a large quantity of specialized cutting-edge facilities to serve Add a comma
facilities,
children
, while
in some households are not, for example
, a large playing filed
, medic, education amenities, and a Correct your spelling
field
balance
diet. With these things, Change the verb form
balanced
children
are
Verb problem
have
accessed
to healthy physical development. Replace the word
access
Secondly
, daycare centers
have well-trained staff in Change the spelling
centres
childcare
skills, and safety knowledge, while
, family members
are not equipped with some essential skills in childcare
major. If children
are in the
emergency case Correct article usage
an
such
as hiccups, their grandparents are not have
any Change the verb form
do not have
experienced
in Replace the word
experience
this
case will do
not know what to do to tackle Unnecessary verb
apply
with
Change preposition
apply
this
issue or they may worsen the situation, while
in childcare
centers
they have enough Change the spelling
centres
medic
staff and medical equipment to address Replace the word
medical
this
issue immediately.
On the other hand
, others are of the opinion that blood is thicker than water. Firstly
, parents and family members
are easier than others in teaching children
because of
Change preposition
apply
children
tend to listen to their own fresh and blood. When children
are facing mental health issues, they prioritize their parents to share their problems and listen to parents’ recommendation
to find a solution rather than a kindergarten teacher. Fix the agreement mistake
recommendations
Furthermore
, children
who is
nurtured and Change the verb form
are
took
care Wrong verb form
taken
by
family Change preposition
of by
members
will have a sense of love from their family members
and belonging, that
is essential for Correct pronoun usage
which
children
when they growing up. In a
study Change preposition
A
indicate
that parents Correct subject-verb agreement
indicates
those
who have Correct pronoun usage
apply
been
grown up in loved by their family from Unnecessary verb
apply
young
age Add an article
a young
are
Verb problem
have
tendency
to behave with their offspring Add an article
the tendency
a tendency
similar
to Change the word
similarly
they
have been taught.
In conclusion, it Correct pronoun usage
what they
seem
evident that the role in teaching and taking care Change the verb form
seems
for
Change preposition
of
children
of preschool age by family members
and childcare
centers
each have their own unique advantages to Change the spelling
centres
children
well-being. The cooperation between family and Change noun form
children's
childcare
centers
Change the spelling
centres
play
an important role in Correct subject-verb agreement
plays
children
’s mental and physical heath
.Correct your spelling
health
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