The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The given diagram delineates the information about the procedure for
preparation
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the preparation
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of drinks which are carbonated in nature. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that four steps are required for making
a carbonated drinks
Correct the article-noun agreement
carbonated drinks
a carbonated drink
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which is followed by packaging and transporting.
Initially
, normal
water
is filtered with the help of
filter
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a filter
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.
This
filtered
water
is passed from the
water
softener. During
which
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this
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chemicals are added and passed to the pump. After pumping,
mixture
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a mixture
the mixture
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of
water
and chemicals
are
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is
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transferred to an electrical heater, for heating. After heating,
water
is moved to the chamber by a pipe which is known as a cooling pipe, to cool down the temperature. On one side of
chamber
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the chamber
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,
cooling
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the cooling
a cooling
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pipe is connected,
while
on another end an inlet is present that
help
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helps
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in
entry
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the entry
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of carbon dioxide.
This
help
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helps
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in formation of the carbonated
water
.
This
carbonated
water
is conveyed to a tank known as
mixing
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a mixing
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tank.
This
tank
have
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has
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three different
sub chambers
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sub-chambers
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in it, one is for colouring, another is for flavouring and in between
of
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apply
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these two a box is present containing the specific kind of syrup. After mixing, it is moved to the filter to get filtered carbonated
water
and the filling is done.
This
water
is filled in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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bottles and cans. These are packaged and supplied to
supermarket
Fix the agreement mistake
supermarkets
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Filtration
  • Water softening
  • Chemical treatment
  • Evaporation
  • Cooling pipe
  • Carbonation
  • Carbon dioxide
  • High pressure
  • Syrup
  • Flavor
  • Color
  • Stirring
  • Uniformity
  • Secondary filtration
  • Bottling
  • Canning
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Retail outlets
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