The charts below show thge percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show thge percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts
shows
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the
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great and
inmportant
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important
information about the amount of
water
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used by the people who were located in six different
areas
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in the world for various purposes, it was picturized clearly in percentage.
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Overall
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ratio
illustrate
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that the communities consumed
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the
water
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for three important
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, one for agriculture, second for industries
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furthermore
they used
for
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domestic needs in
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the diverse
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region namely North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe,
Aferica
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Africa
, Central Asia and South East Asia.
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the images, it minutely visualized the consumption
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of
H2O, it varied depending upon different zones. 53% of humans
ultizing
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utilizing
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water
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in Southern
America
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as much
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similar
to
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North
America
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they
were
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using
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up to
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48% for industrial use
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88% of central Asia members
consuming
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aqua as little reaching
to
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the height of
Africa
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people who
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for agriculture.
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individuals from particular locality that was South Americans using for domestic cause.
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,
on
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the result points out that the usage of
water
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for agriculture was the major
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by
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the human species compared to other
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the industrial
cause
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slightly higher in Europe related to
following
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the following
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listed
areas
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.
Domestic
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The domestic
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purpose is the lowest usage of
water
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were mentioned expect two
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one were South
America
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as well as
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Europe.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, areas, america with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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