Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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learning
mother’s
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language
is often seen
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important than learning
English
. It is of course really important to learn
English
since it
used
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in many countries to communicate, but
on the other hand
, it is important to continue learning their
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language
. First of foremost, learning
English
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been one of the essential course in Indonesia. As many
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, learning
English
can improve their country’s information exchange, especially in
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economic growth.
For instance
,
language
become a tool for
people
to communicate
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some
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conversations
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lead to
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the marketplace. In another example, learning
English
can be profitable for studying. Many sources are frequently written in
English
. By learning
English
,
people
can understand many information they need for study.
On the other hand
, if
people
only learn
English
without
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a strong foundation with their main
language
, the possibility of the disappearance of the local
language
will grow drastically.
People
need to preserve the local
language
since it is the main culture of a country. In order to maintain the local
language
, it is important for
school
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schools
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to teach the basic
skill
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skills
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the
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one
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for
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the
student
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.
This
will cause the understanding of student knowledge about their local
language
become
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mature. Their local
language
should be the first
language
they learn before they learn
other
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language
.
Last
but not least, it is crucial for
government
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the government
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to enlighten many stakeholders
such
as parents, teachers, and society to maintain the local
language
so it will not perish. By
this
action,
people
will start paying attention to their culture and will
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be ensuring
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the survival of their
language
.
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