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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So governments and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is certainly true that
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environment
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the environment
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play
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essential
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an essential
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 role in
everyone
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everyone's
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 life. Day by day,
problems
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 related to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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is
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are
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 increasing
fastly
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.But ,nowadays,
people
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 always contribute to
reduce
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reducing
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 these
problems
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while
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,
Other
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the Other
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 side,
well -known
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well-known
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 organizations should help to mitigate
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this
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this problem
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problems
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. I
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am
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partially agree with
this
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 statement.
To begin
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 with,
good
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a good
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environment
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give
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gives
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 good
health
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 to
people
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. So, governments and big companies should impose strict rules and regulations to protect the
atomshere
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atmosphere
.Because good
environment
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puts
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good
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a good
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 effect on
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people
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people's
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health
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 and they can stay
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health
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healthy
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as well as
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 away from many diseases like Asthma.
Big
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The big
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industry
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industries
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 should install new machines for recycling the waste and should proper
sawage
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sewage
savage
 for
waste water
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wastewater
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.
Apart from
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this
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,
big
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the big
a big
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 corporation should use solar energy, which
reduce
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reduces
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 the
consuming
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consumption
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 of fossil fuel.
As a consequence
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, it would be beneficial for both
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environment
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the environment
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as well as
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 organization because they can save
their
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apply
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money by doing
this
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.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 should maintain the area because many
problems
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occurs
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occur
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 from air and citizen should make
team
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a team
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 and clean up their area and sort out trash collected in their area. It
puts
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has
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a
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positive effect on
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people
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people's
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health
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 and
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environment
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the environment
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. When they work together
its
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it
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also
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enhance
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enhances
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 affection toward each other
as well as
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improve
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improves
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 the quality of life.
People
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 get
chance
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a chance
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 to learn new
thing
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things
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 when they work in
team
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a team
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 .
To sum up
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,
government
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the government
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 should impose strict
law
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laws
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 related to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 .the big companies should organize the seminar. which
provide
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provides
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 the knowledge about
environment
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.
Citizen
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Citizens
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 should make
committee
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committees
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 and do meeting
time
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from time
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 to time
for reducing
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to reduce
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the
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apply
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environment
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environmental
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 waste.

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