The table shows independent film releases by genre in the UK and Republic of Ireland in 2012.

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The graph above illustrates

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of releases and the

income

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of the independent films released by different

genre

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genres

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in the UK and Ireland in 2012.

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, the total films released in 2012 were 148. It can be clearly seen that

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drama and documentary had the most number of releases whilst biopic is the least of all. Each documentary and drama presented 35 movies, yet their

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from ticket sales was pretty different.

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drama made 8.3%, documentary only made

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2.9%. Comedy,

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, scored the highest percentage of

income

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at 45.4% even though the amount of comedy being put on the market

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26 films per year. Horror and

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thrillers

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released slightly the same amount in a year at about 14.

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, their

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was imbalance because

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horror got 20.2%, thriller scored very low sales at 1.3% Romance and action

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brought the same amount at around 5.

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romance made the least

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among all, action movies received 4.1% from cinema

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biopic

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the biopic

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genre only launched 1 movie at that time but the transaction is not

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disappointing

at 9.1%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

183 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

The table illustrates
data on
independent film releases
by genre
in the UK and Republic of Ireland
highest number of releases
most popular genre
second most popular
significant number of releases
relatively fewer releases
lowest number of releases
overall
common genres
substantial presence
moderate number of releases
least number of releases
provides insights into
distribution of
across different genres

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