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The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts illustrate the reasons why
people
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 in the
UK
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 chose to immigrate and emigrate in 2007.
Overall
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, job opportunities remained the common factor for both
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categories, meanwhile, academic reasons witnessed the biggest difference in data.
To begin
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 with, the highest number of
people
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 (i.e., 30%) chose to come to the
UK
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 for their secured work,
whereas
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 only 12% arrived in the
UK
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 looking for work.
This
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 is followed by academia and dependent visas at 26% and 15%, respectively.
Lastly
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, the least amount of
people
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 immigrate to the
UK
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 for no reason at only 6%,
this
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 means that everyone arrives with a purpose.
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, the greatest reason for
people
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 leaving the
UK
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 is
also
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 for jobs;
that is
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, 29% of the public received a job offer
while
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 22% migrated to another country in order to find work.
Also
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, 13% of the British public leaves to accompany their partner which is a difference of 2% from those that are arriving in the
UK
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.
In contrast
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 to the immigration data, the smallest percentage in the emigration chart belongs to the education sector, at only 4%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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