The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie graphs illustrate the result of a survey of girls' and
boys
' cultural and leisure activities.
Overall
, both genders enjoyed listening to music and playing computer
games
, females also
enjoyed reading, whereas
males were not passionate about it.
Boys
spend their
majority of Change the word
the
spare
Correct pronoun usage
their spare
time
on
playing Change preposition
apply
computer
games
(34 per cent
participation
rate
), after computer
games
second most popular activity for boys
is basketball(26 per cent
participation
rate
), boys
also
like playing soccer, skateboarding and listening to music. The lowest rate
had reading only 2 per cent
of them spend their free time
to read
books.
Girls spend Change the verb form
reading
their
majority of Change the word
the
leisure
Correct pronoun usage
their leisure
time
on dancing(27 per cent
participation
rate
), reading
comes as the second most popular leisure(21 per Correct word choice
and reading
cent
), despite dancing and reading girls spend their time
on
playing Change preposition
apply
computer
games
(16 per cent
), netball(15 per cent
) and gymnastics(11 per cent
). Listening to music was the lowest rate
compared to other activities its participation
rate
was only 10 per cent
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