The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The pie graphs illustrate the result of a survey of girls' and
boys
' cultural and leisure activities.
Overall
, both genders enjoyed listening to music and playing
computer
games
, females
also
enjoyed reading,
whereas
males were not passionate about it. 
Boys
spend
their
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the
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majority of
spare
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their spare
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time
on
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apply
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playing
computer
games
(34 per
cent
participation
rate
), after
computer
games
second most popular activity for
boys
is basketball(26 per
cent
participation
rate
),
boys
also
like playing soccer, skateboarding and listening to music. The lowest
rate
had reading only 2 per
cent
of them spend their free
time
to read
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reading
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books. Girls spend
their
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the
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majority of
leisure
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their leisure
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time
on dancing(27 per
cent
participation
rate
),
reading
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and reading
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comes as the second most popular leisure(21 per
cent
), despite dancing and reading girls spend their
time
on
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apply
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playing
computer
games
(16 per
cent
), netball(15 per
cent
) and gymnastics(11 per
cent
). Listening to music was the lowest
rate
compared to other activities its
participation
rate
was only 10 per
cent
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