The bar chart below shows shares of expenditure for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditure for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
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The bar chart depicts the shares of expenditure for five categories in 5 countries in 2009.
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, all the countries underwent distinguished changes.
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food, housing and transportation accounted for the majority of the expenditures, the opposite could be seen in the other categories. More than 50% of the budget was allocated for food, housing and transportation. Standing at 26%, US expenditure on housing was the highest, followed by the UK, Japan, and Canada.
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the Americans spent the most on housing, the Japanese’s food and housing expenses were equal, at 24%.
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, Canadians had to pay 20% for both transportation
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and housing which was higher than the others.
On the other hand
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, healthcare and clothing covered a minority of just under 10%.
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the US was the only country which allocated more than 5% for medical, triple that figure for the UK, the others were below
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rate.
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the US and Japan shared the same budgets of 4% on clothing, both Canada and the UK spent more than 6% which was 2% higher.
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