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It is not necessary for people to travel to other places and learn about their culture. We can learn as much as from books, film and television. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #travel #places #culture #books #film #television
Nowadays, many individuals love to travel to different places to gain more
knowlege
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knowledge
 regarding the
culture
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another countries
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another country
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 rather than in books,
film
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films
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 and television. To
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 with, it is
necesssary
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necessary
 for
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many people to travel
in
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to
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the
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different places in the whole world so that you can see with your own eyes how beautiful the
culture
 of different
nationalilities
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nationalities
.
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, it can gain
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friendships
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friendship
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to
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 other
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cultures
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culture
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cultures
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as well as
 your
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confident
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 will be
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boost
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 and your prospectives about the country that you visited
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with
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.
Furthermore
, there
a
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lot of
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 for you that
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in
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good
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 manner. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, in order to see the beauty of the
culture
 of the state it
better
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 to
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 the place rather than
watching
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 the film, books and
televion
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television
.
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,
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in
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the other
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 country will
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in
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 the food if not your comfort food.
Furthermore
, it is difficult to understand the language of different nationalities as long as their personality.
Moreover
, it can be
scarry
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 because you are in
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 place you did not know. In conclusion, traveling
in
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the
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places to see
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acknowlege theire
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acknowledge them
 is worth it it
keep
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 memories that your family but it is risky
beacuse
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because
 you will does know what happen that place is safe for you.
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