You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentage of Australian men in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts below show the percentage of Australian men in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.
The given bar chart delineates the information about the percentage of Australian
male
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males
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of three distinct
age
group
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groups
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,
that is
15 to 19, 35-44 and 60-64, who are employed in three different years that are 1984, 2001 and 2014. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that men of the
age
from 35 to 44
ae
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are
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more employed
in
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each year, as compared to other
age
differences. In 1984, only 62.5
peecent
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per cent
of men
with
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the
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age
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15 to 19
are
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were
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employed,
while
this
value
remains
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remained
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in parallel during 2001.
However
, in 2014, working individuals from the
age
of 15-19 declined and
this
accounts for only 50%. Men from the
age
of 35 to 44 are identical in all
the
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three years
that is
1984, 2001 and 2014, which accounts for about 95%. The percentage of people from the
age
60 to 64, were similar during the year
of
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1984 and 2001, which is about 40%. Somehow,
this
number
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increased to 60% in 2014.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment trends
  • age groups
  • significant changes
  • employment rates
  • economic shifts
  • technological advancements
  • societal changes
  • policy-making
  • workforce participation
  • labor market dynamics
  • demographic shifts
  • career longevity
  • early retirement
  • job market competitiveness
  • technological unemployment
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