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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA (2003-2013) 40% 35% 30% 25% 20% 15% 10% 5% 0% Every day Several times a week Once a week Once or twice a month A few times a year Never 2003 2006 У 2013

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA (2003-2013) 40% 35% 30% 25% 20% 15% 10% 5% 0% Every day Several times a week Once a week Once or twice a month A few times a year Never 2003 2006 У 2013
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The given image depicts
bar
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a bar
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 chart representing the trends in
consumption
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the consumption
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 of fast
food
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 in the USA between 2003 and 2013.
To begin
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 with, most
people
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 consume their fast
food
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 in once a week between 2003 and 2013.
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While
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In
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 2013 they
change
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changed
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 their habits
as taken
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to taking
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 once or twice a month.
Whereas
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,
lower
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a lower
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 number of society
taken
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took
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 every day fast
food
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 between 2003 and 2013.
Moreover
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, in 2016 and 2013 equal amount of
people
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 consumed their street foods at 15%.
At
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In
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 the same year, they had a lower amount of snacks in
everyday
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every day
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 and some
are
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were
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 never consumed. Remarkably, in 2003,
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people
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people's
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consumed
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consumption
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 level had
been
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apply
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increased consistently,
while
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 they
taken
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had eaten
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 more fast
food
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in
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apply
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once a week.
However
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, in 2013, more
people
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 reduced their consumption level
while
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had
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having
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 once or twice a month at approximately 32%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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