Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others belive that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Universities are
one
of the important aspects of human life because they can create a context in which
students
develop numerous skills and abilities. By the same token, some argue that pupils should learn and
study
the
subjects
and courses which they are really interested
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,
while
others
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that
students
should
study
merely what is useful or practical for their
future
. I would say both arguments have validity, but I would lean toward the former.
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the
one
hand, studying the
subjects
which will be useful for the
future
of university
students
is critical
due to
the fact that
students
will have
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stable life in terms of economic conditions in the
future
,
In other words
,
subjects
like science or technology will give the
students
the abilities and skills which are critical if he/she wants to land a decent job. Having a good job with
adequete
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adequate
perks and benefits in
this
highly competitive labour market would not be easy if the person does not have sufficient information and abilities.
Consequently
, landing a good career will give people economic
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, which is of prime importance.
On the other hand
, giving university
students
the possibility
of studying
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whatever they desire can help them to be more successful in their major and even
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. To explain more, having
interest
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an interest
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in
subjects
will act as an incentive for
students
. They can deep
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the courses and use their knowledge in a practical context, not just memorize a number of sentences or formulas without any understanding. In
this
way, they can acquire a golden opportunity to
study
and learn more
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with
positive
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mindset. They even are more motivated to conduct research in that field and maybe devise new methods, which can help that major
also
.
For instance
, consider a student whose always desire is to
studt
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study
art at the university
instead
of mathematics or technology.
This
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students
will delve into
this
field and become
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well-known
artist
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rather than
a
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regular
person
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people
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in
the
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science. If people like
Bethhoven
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Beethoven
had not thought in
this
way, people wouldn't have had
such
a
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maestro
in
this
world. In conclusion, I tend to think that both
subjects
like the
one's
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which are essential for the
future
of
students
and the ones which
students
desire to
study
will be useful.
However
, not
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children to just
study
the former
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would exert constructive effects on
students
.
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