The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#aim #science #people #lives

Nowadays, many countries in

this

world are in a race to achieve their aim with

science

. The key to many human

problems

science

for reducing population,

accommodation

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and accommodation

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issues and

enhance

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enhancing

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lives

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the lives

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of humankind. I hold a strong opinion that people’s lives should be the

center

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goal of scientific

endeavors

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endeavours

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Firstly

, there are still many significant human issues that need to be addressed to ensure the survival of humanity, we only have

science

to help us face these massive

problems

. One of these is people’s

heath

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health

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, with

application

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the application

an application

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science

was

save

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millions of lives from death. Medical research and breakthroughs have resulted in the discovery of

live-saving

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life-saving

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treatment

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treatments

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for fatal

disease

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diseases

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vaccine

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vaccines

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, and diagnostic tools to help people live longer,

make

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and make

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people diseased escape from chronic pain. By prioritizing the importance of

science

human’s

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heath

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health

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science

play

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crucial role

reducing

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in reducing

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mortality rate, preventing infectious disease, and alleviating pain.

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science

also

make

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human social

problems

became more easier to solve. Many crucial social

problems

such

as urbanization,

over population

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overpopulation

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, and urban planning with

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the helps

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helps

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help

bits of help

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science

and technology will reduce risk, and with support

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science

, we can even predict potential

issue

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issues

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to prevent

before

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them before

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happen.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

201 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

crucial role
technological advancements
medical discoveries
life-changing inventions
innovations
solutions to human problems
enhancing quality of life
improvement of healthcare
transportation
communication
agriculture
energy sectors
eradication of diseases
prolongation of life expectancy
global challenges
climate change
overpopulation
food security
developed world
underprivileged communities

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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