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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Chorleywood
village
 which is located near to the main city London has shown a considerable rise
of
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 their population because of the development which happened between the
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of
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1868 and 1994.
Overall
it is clear that
,when the transportation ways were established, new
village
 areas were developed around it.
To begin
 with,before the development era ,Chorleywood was a small
village
had
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 only the main
road
, park, golf course and less residential area.The area
which
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located left side
to
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 the golf course and right to the main
road
 was developed between 1868 and 1883.
Furthermore
, a new railway which crossed the southern part of the main
road
 was built in 1909 and the community
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increased considerably around the station and the southern part of the
village
 during the next 60 years.
Moreover
,the development of the east side of the
village
 was started in 1970 after the opening of a new motorway which crossed the main
road
 from the north and the railway from the south.
Also
 during the period of 1970 to 1994, new
village
 areas were developed
at
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the
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both
side
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sides
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 of the motorway.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • geographical features
  • 19th century
  • construction
  • public buildings
  • railways
  • infrastructure
  • economic activities
  • housing developments
  • commercial zones
  • environmental concerns
  • deforestation
  • traffic
  • urban sprawl
  • notable architecture
  • landmarks
  • urbanization
  • expansion
  • modernization
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