The chart shows the proportion of energy produced from different sources in a country between1985 and 2003.

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The diagram illustrates

energy

usage differences in a country from 1995 to 2003.

Overall

while

it is clear that

the amount of

energy

generated from oil has the highest proportion, that of Coal, Hydro, and Nuclear resources chased dramatic Changes.

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with, it is noticeable that despite a 40% decline

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proportion of the

energy

produced from oil

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, it remained the most reliable resource for

this

purpose throughout the eight years.

Moreover

, Nuclear resources dedicated just over 20% of

energy

generation to itself in the year 1985.

However

, the sum plummeted to almost

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half of the initial percentage( 8%). Moving on to the Coal and Natural gases, both of which started at a mere 10%

energy

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same rate, 23% and 22%,

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respectively

In addition

, Hydro has plateaued at 4% in the mentioned years.

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