The diagram below shows the stages involved in producing one bottle of wine.

The diagram below shows the stages involved in producing one bottle of wine.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the stages involved in producing one bottle of wine.
The
process
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diagram gives the eight steps to make a single
bottle
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of
wine
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.
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, producing and transporting one
bottle
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of
wine
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is an eight-stage
process
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which starts
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picking the
grapes
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and ends with sending the bottles to the supper market. 400
grapes
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are needed to produce one
bottle
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while
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waste
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is produced at three stages of
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process
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.
First,
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the
grapes
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are picked and collected to be juiced. During
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process
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, 400 riped
grapes
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are needed to produce 3000ml of juice . The
waste
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generated from the juicing is sent to be composted. After that, the grape juice is left to ferment for two weeks before being sent to be pressed. The unpressed
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is
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composted
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the remaining 100ml of liquid is sent through a filtration
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. The filtering system
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produces residual
waste
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, which is
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composed,
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the liquid is sent to be stored in barrels. After having aged barrels for a period of time, the
wine
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is ready to be bottled. In total a single
bottle
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containing 750ml of
wine
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has been bottled, and it is ready to be sent to supermarkets to be sold.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, bottle, wine, grapes, waste with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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