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The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table illustrates the difference between the percentage of
workforce
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 and manager
women
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 in five countries. These countries include Australia, Egypt, Sri Lanka, Japan and the United States.
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, the figure of
women
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 in the
workforce
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 in Japan commanded the highest proportion,
whereas
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women
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 working as
managers
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 have the smallest rate in Sri Lanka. Regarding Australia and the United States region, the rate of
managers
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 who are
women
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are
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 similar, at 43% each.
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, the percentage of
women
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 who work in the
workforce
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 in the United States is higher than that of Australia, at 46% and 42% respectively. The figure for Egypt is
lowest
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 in the rate of
women
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 who are in the
workforce
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, at 20%. There are 12%
women
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 who work as
managers
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 in
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 area. Japan and Sri Lanka have relatively similar figures for both categories, but the second country is overtaken by another country, at 48% and 41% respectively.
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, there are almost two-fold the percentage of
women
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 who work as
managers
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 from 9% to 17% .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workforce, women, managers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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