The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The 

table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by 

selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie diagram depicts the population in different online languages in 2001
while
the table chart
gives
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the number of people who
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used
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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each year between 1997 and 2001. Briefly, English was the most popular
languge
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language
in the online world,
moreover
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moreover,
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the trend of users
incresed
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increased
over the period. It is
so
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clear that
english
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English
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users were the highest number which structure stayed at 43%
while
the
japanese
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chinese and
german
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which were at 8.9%, 8.8%, and 6.8%, respectively.
In other words
, the other was below 10%. For the
quantity
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of people
were
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using the internet, the numbers
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improved
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along the way from 76 in 1997 and reached out to 513 in 2001.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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