The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during peroid 2011-12.

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The table below shows the number of people

involving

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involved

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in different

sport

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sports

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in the USA in

years

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the years

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2010 and 2014. In

this

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set of data group of 18-34 years old citizens

are

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considered.

Overall

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, every

sports

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sport

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have witnessed significant changes with

exception

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the exception

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of weightlifting. The largest positive change in popularity

were

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was

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observed in yoga and running with each sport gaining 3 million participants. The biggest fall in involvement

was experiences

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was experienced

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by swimming, particularly losing 2.5 million followers. There is a trend, which has

occured

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occurred

in 4 years, that team sports,

such

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as basketball, baseball and softball are becoming less relevant. Contrary to that, non-team activities,

for example

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hiking, yoga and running, are actually increasing their popularity levels.

However

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, swimming and weightlifting are outliers of the pattern discussed above.

Generallly

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Generally

, the total

ivolvement

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involvement

young

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the young

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USA population has

saw

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seen

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a small increase from 79.3 to 80.3 million, which is a sign that America is moving towards healthiness and longevity.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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158 words

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