The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during peroid 2011-12.

The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during peroid 2011-12.
The table below shows the number of people
involving
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involved
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in different
sport
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sports
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in the USA in
years
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the years
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2010 and 2014. In
this
set of data group of 18-34 years old citizens
are
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is
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considered.
Overall
, every
sports
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sport
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have witnessed significant changes with
exception
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the exception
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of weightlifting. The largest positive change in popularity
were
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was
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observed in yoga and running with each sport gaining 3 million participants. The biggest fall in involvement
was experiences
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was experienced
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by swimming, particularly losing 2.5 million followers. There is a trend, which has
occured
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occurred
in 4 years, that team sports,
such
as basketball, baseball and softball are becoming less relevant. Contrary to that, non-team activities,
for example
hiking, yoga and running, are actually increasing their popularity levels.
However
, swimming and weightlifting are outliers of the pattern discussed above.
Generallly
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Generally
, the total
ivolvement
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involvement
of
young
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the young
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USA population has
saw
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seen
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a small increase from 79.3 to 80.3 million, which is a sign that America is moving towards healthiness and longevity.
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