The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during peroid 2011-12.

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The table below shows the number of people

involving

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involved

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in different

sport

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sports

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in the USA in

years

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the years

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2010 and 2014. In

this

set of data group of 18-34 years old citizens

are

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considered.

Overall

, every

sports

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sport

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have witnessed significant changes with

exception

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the exception

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of weightlifting. The largest positive change in popularity

were

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was

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observed in yoga and running with each sport gaining 3 million participants. The biggest fall in involvement

was experiences

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was experienced

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by swimming, particularly losing 2.5 million followers. There is a trend, which has

occured

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occurred

in 4 years, that team sports,

such

as basketball, baseball and softball are becoming less relevant. Contrary to that, non-team activities,

for example

hiking, yoga and running, are actually increasing their popularity levels.

However

, swimming and weightlifting are outliers of the pattern discussed above.

Generallly

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Generally

, the total

ivolvement

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involvement

young

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the young

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USA population has

saw

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seen

sawed

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a small increase from 79.3 to 80.3 million, which is a sign that America is moving towards healthiness and longevity.

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The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during peroid 2011-12.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some children spend a long time each day on their smartphones. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

More people today put their personal and private information online (address, telephone number, credit card number) to do everyday activities such as banking, shopping, and socializing. Is this a positive or negative development?

Now a days, many families are rarely having meals together. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or a negative development.

Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at the school. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?