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some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main sbjects. other believe it is more important to give all their time and attendtion to studying for qualifications. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#university #students #subjects #addition #sbjects #time #attendtion #qualifications
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modern society, it is always debatable whether
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college’s
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 students
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 on their main
subjects
. Some argue that it is imperative to give all their concentration on studying for qualifications,
others
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 think
single
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 profession isn’t enough for
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 jobs these days. Under essay will discuss
about
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this
 topic. First and foremost, learning about other
subjects
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 one’s perspective when solving problems,
due to
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 ways of building one’s logic in each
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, you’ll get to know the difference
about
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 how people think.
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, the increasing amount of skillset outperforms
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from
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other students,
that is
 to say, skills across diverse major,
for instance
, finance and programming,
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 your resume identical when applying
your
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 ideal jobs.
Last
 but not least, when it comes
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to challenged tasks, two or more abilities from different majors sufficiently boost the capability of finishing them,
therefore
, highlighting your working performance which is
undeniable
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 useful when there are any chances for promotions. On the other
hands
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, some major about designing might be more suitable for giving the entire concentration on it. In order to
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 in professions like designing, time
spending
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 on seeking creativity or ideas is necessary,
therefore
, the value of time is priceless.
Moreover
, unimaginable effort
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 practice is
also
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, as someone said: “Practice makes perfect”. We can know that there might be no time for students studying
designing
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 to learn about other
subjects
. To summarize, as a student
majors
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 in finance, I’ll say during the generation that technologies advance rapidly, cross-professionals
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 a crucial role especially when seeking
for
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higher achievement in your career.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diversify
  • expand
  • academic pursuits
  • well-rounded education
  • multidisciplinary approach
  • comprehensive understanding
  • broaden one's horizons
  • acquire new skills
  • develop critical thinking
  • resolve complex issues
  • boost employability
  • strengthen one's foundation
  • pursue personal growth
  • achieve career success
  • strike a balance
  • gain an edge
  • mainstream subjects
  • narrow-minded
  • rigorous studying
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