You are temporarily moving to a new city for your job. You will be there for three months, and you would like to rent some accommodation for your stay. Write to an accommodation rental office. In your letter •Tell them how long you are staying •Describe the type of accommodation you would like •Explain what facilities you will need nearby

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to ask you about your accommodation. My name is Sara Zare and I am going to stay in Shiraz
city
for three months from the first of May. I need some facilities and needed, so I decided to explain them with
this
letter. In fact, I am a newcomer to Shiraz
City
, I will stay here
due to
my career mission, and
also
, I
want
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to rent an apartment located in the
city
center which has one bedroom, have up-to-date bathroom with a modern music player and
also
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an also
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a suitable and perfect furniture
such
as a set of stylish sofa and king size bed
as well as
equipment with heating foods. I have to add, I prefer it to be located on the highest floor and has a view of the
city
.
Furthermore
, I do not know how to commute to my company so I would prefer my flat to be located near the taxi station.
Moreover
, it would have some cameras to observe it and be connected to the police station because my schedule work is very compact and I have to go to the office from 9 a.m. to 10 p.m. so I need extra protective ways. And
also
, I rather the flat be near to restaurants rather than a fast-food store. You are not afraid of the cost, but between 4 million to 6 million per month is better. Thank you for your help and if you need more information, you will be calling me on 083673637. Yours faithfully, Sara Zare
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