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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams compare the development of Stokeford during the period of eighty years.
Overall
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, during the time
period
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period,
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 farmlands have been dug up and replaced with housing, as a whole the illustration depicts the transition from a rural area to an urban village. The eastern part of the map includes the most redeveloped buildings, including the primary school which behind counts with two new buildings.
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Similarly
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 the large house situated in the middle of the map has been expanded and repurposed as a retirement home.
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, farmlands situated at the north and south part of the illustration have been replaced with new housing
complex
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 and roads that connect all the new constructions. The only building that has not
being
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been
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restrctutured
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restructured
 or repurposed is the post office which is still
at
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in
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 the same place
in
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as in
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 1930.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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