Some people think young people are not suitable for important positions in the government,while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on these positions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,There is a controversy on filling up young
people
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roles
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in
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government
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the government
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sector
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and nowadays,young
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perform vital
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jobs
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in both
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the private
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and the public
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sector
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.There are advantages and disadvantages
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filling up young
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to major
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in the public
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and
in
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this
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essay, it is
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both views and
illustrate
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to what extent young
people
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suits
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for
the
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vital
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in
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government
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the government
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sector
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.
Firstly
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, If a country looking forward to
employ
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employing
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teenagers
to
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the
government
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position it will lead to
eliminate
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eliminating
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the traditional working environment and
insert
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inserting
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technological advancements into the workplace.As an example when India
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more
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to the public
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occupation in the year 2022 by the initiative of 'rebuild of
India'
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it is
impact
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to eradicate the current
buracratic
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bureaucratic
working environment and improve
modern
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the modern
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working environment.When
provide
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providing
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a better services
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better services
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to the nation from
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government
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sector
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it is
improtant
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important
to improve the value for money
through increase
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the
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efficiency and
effectivness
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effectiveness
.The young
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always
look
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forward to
improve
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productivity so
through
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hiring more
people
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to major
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it
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will lead to
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the targets of
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sector
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.
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,it is inevitable
for
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completely replace the
experience
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workforce from some major positions in the public
sector
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.The skills
which
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require
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to perform the job
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unique and
its
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hard to replace young
blood
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to
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those positions.As an example
in
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the irrigation department of Srilanka operates only through more
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people
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and
replace
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replacing
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teenagers
to
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those job
roles
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is not feasible since
its
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require
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requires
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specific skills which only able to
acquire
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through
the
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experience. In conclusion,If
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government
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the government
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develop a better plan to gradually replace
the
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youngsters
to
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with
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key
roles
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in
public
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sector
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, it will lead to
generate
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generating
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more positives
to
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the
countries
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economy.I strongly believe that there should be a program need to be implemented by
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government
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in every nation to
imbeed
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imbued
young
blood
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to the
essestial
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essential
positions in the workforce.
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