Some people think young people are not suitable for important positions in the government，while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on these positions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays,There is a controversy on filling up young
people
to important roles
in government
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the government
sector
and nowadays,young people
perform vital job
in both Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
private
and the public Correct article usage
the private
sector
.There are advantages and disadvantages Fix the agreement mistake
sectors
by
filling up young Change preposition
to
blood
to major roles
in the public sector
and in
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apply
this
essay, it is discuss
both views and Wrong verb form
discusses
illustrate
to what extent young Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrates
people
suits
for Wrong verb form
are suited
the
vital Correct article usage
apply
roles
in government
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the government
sector
.
Firstly
, If a country looking forward to employ
teenagers Change the verb form
employing
to
the Change preposition
in
government
position it will lead to eliminate
the traditional working environment and Wrong verb form
eliminating
insert
technological advancements into the workplace.As an example when India Wrong verb form
inserting
hire
more Correct subject-verb agreement
hires
people
to the public sector
occupation in the year 2022 by the initiative of 'rebuild of India'
it is Add a comma
India',
impact
to eradicate the current Wrong verb form
impacted
buracratic
working environment and improve Correct your spelling
bureaucratic
modern
working environment.When Add an article
the modern
provide
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providing
a better services
to the nation from Correct the article-noun agreement
better services
a better service
government
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the government
sector
it is improtant
to improve the value for money Correct your spelling
important
through increase
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by increasing
the
efficiency and Correct article usage
apply
effectivness
.The young Correct your spelling
effectiveness
blood
always look
forward to Change the verb form
looks
improve
productivity so Change the verb form
improving
through
hiring more Change preposition
apply
people
to major roles
it
will lead to Correct pronoun usage
apply
achieve
the targets of Change the verb form
achieving
public
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the public
sector
.
On the other hand
,it is inevitable for
completely replace the Change preposition
to
experience
workforce from some major positions in the public Change the verb form
experienced
sector
.The skills which
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apply
require
to perform the job Wrong verb form
required
is
unique and Correct subject-verb agreement
are
its
hard to replace young Replace the word
it's
it is
blood
to
those positions.As an example Change preposition
in
in
the irrigation department of Srilanka operates only through more Change preposition
apply
experience
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experienced
people
and replace
teenagers Wrong verb form
replacing
to
those job Change preposition
in
roles
is not feasible since its
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it
require
specific skills which only able to Correct subject-verb agreement
requires
acquire
through Wrong verb form
acquired
the
experience.
In conclusion,If Correct article usage
apply
government
develop a better plan to gradually replace Correct article usage
the government
the
youngsters Correct article usage
apply
to
key Change preposition
with
roles
in public
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the public
sector
, it will lead to generate
more positives Change the verb form
generating
to
the Change preposition
for
countries
economy.I strongly believe that there should be a program need to be implemented by Change noun form
country's
government
in every nation to Add an article
the government
imbeed
young Correct your spelling
imbued
blood
to the essestial
positions in the workforce.Correct your spelling
essential
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