The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.

The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.
The line graph illustrates the
amount
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of British people who watch films separated by generations during the
period
of sixteen years.
Overall
, during the
period
studied, the total quantity of attendees has increased significantly and only two age groups seem to have
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attendance during the end of the
period
. During the
period
of 1984 to around 1997
indistinctively
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of age group, all British people
have
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consumed more watch time of movies. Despite
of
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this
, British movie consumers
aging
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15 to 24, 7 to 14 and 25 have decreased
at the end
of the year 2000. Great Britain citizens
aging
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35 and over that go to the cinema have slowly but steadily grown in amount as time passes, ranging from around 1 % in 1984 to just up of 10%
at
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in
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2000. In spite of
this
, groups formed by 15 to 24, 7 to 14 and 25 to 35 years outnumber in average consumption of big screen entertainment.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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