Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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on television and online
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has been a compelling issue. There are opposing views on the
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. A few
number of
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people
think that it has a negative
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the community,
whereas
some disagree that it has a strong influence on an individual's way of thinking. It is argued that violent media
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can impact
someone
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effects of media content in
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society. Seeing
a violent
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contents
from
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online games
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games
or television can cause trauma to an individual.
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individuals are not a part of those
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, their brains tend to unconsciously apply what they have seen in
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real life
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situations.
For instance
, if
someone
keep on playing violent
games
all the time, they lose real social interaction skills
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and tend to become violent with real human.
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violent media
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makes them short-tempered and violent.
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of restrictions on what
people
can see online makes them think that violence is a normal thing that happens daily.
For example
, citizens of
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country like
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are always anxious that
someone
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street, so when feeling like something is not right, they attack
someone
first to protect themselves.
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violent content can negatively influence a person's way of thinking.
To conclude
,
although
a number of
people
view that violent content on television and in online
games
has no accurate
effect
on
people
's
behavior
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, few
people
still think that it has a detrimental
effect
on
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society.
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my personal view, it has a strong influence on how
people
behave. The authorities should provide more
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restrictions
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on
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available for
people
to see.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • aggressive behavior
  • emotional and psychological development
  • impair
  • empathy
  • contributing factor
  • distinction
  • fiction and reality
  • mature audiences
  • reflective
  • prevalence
  • societal issues
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