The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011

The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011
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The two pie charts compare the proportion of vital expenditures including food, clothing,medicines and household goods in Chinese families in 1995 and 2001.
Overall
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, the vast majority of family spending in China was on food, whilst the expense of medicines was the least for the years 1995 and 2011.
Initially
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,
according to
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the information shown in the diagram, eating cost the most of the family budget in the given time which was 68% in 1995 and 59% in 2011.
By contrast
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, medical cost was the lowest at 4% in 1995 and 11% in 2011. What should be particularly mentioned was the spending on household products increased by 3% which was 9% in 1995 and 12% in 2011,
while
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Chinese families decreased their expenditure on clothing by 1% which was from 19% to 18%.
To sum up
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, it can be apparently seen that the demand
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medicines and household goods in China increased
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its growth in distribution which decreased the percentages of clothes and eating.
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