The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
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age
groups who had a routine in doing physical activity in 2010.
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, the opposite was true for that of the 15-24 ones. Linking Words
On the other hand
, the figure witnessed a relatively equal number of sports participants in the Linking Words
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group of over 65.
The share of people aged 65+ experienced a similarity of 46,7 for males and 47.1 for females in joining regular physical activity in 2010.
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, the males' figure was proximately 5% higher than the females' which were 52.8% and 47.7% respectively followed by Linking Words
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