‘It is the job of governments and companies to deal with the huge environmental problems which we face. Individuals on their own can do little or nothing’. What is your opinion about this statement?

Nowadays,
people
put their elderly
relatives
in care homes or nursing homes.
However
, many
people
don’t do that. So let’s talk about
advantages
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and disadvantages of nursing homes. On the one
hand
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hand,
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when
relative
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a relative
the relative
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is in
nursing
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a nursing
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home
people
don’t need to worry and look after their elderly
relatives
. Sometimes
people
can forget about them.
For example
,
man
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a man
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has problems with his family and he has no time to take care
about
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of
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his mother. And the best decision in
this
situation is to put her in
nursing
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a nursing
the nursing
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home
.
Moreover
, if
relative
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a relative
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has
mental
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illness
people
can put him in
nursing
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a nursing
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home
.
On the other
hand
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is that
relatives
can’t see each other. I think it is difficult to cope without it. The second disadvantage is that nursing
home
residents can’t live a full life. Because in everything they do they have support.
Whatever
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Whether
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they want it or not.
To conclude
I can say that everything depends on
life
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situation of
relatives
. If old family members
is
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okay and there is someone who can support them it is okay to stay for old
people
. But if it’s nobody who can take care
about
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of
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them nursing
home
is the best option.
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