Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about how to reduce
traffic
accidents, some of them believe that giving a punishment is a good way, but
other
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say that we can combine several ways to promote
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driving. I certainly agree to use the combination of several ways to make our roads safer. On one hand, there are many rules about driving and they are good to be used to promote the safety of driving. The rules explain
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traffic
offences and people who
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the wrong
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will get the punishment.
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, police will take
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car which is parked
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the
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prohibited places
such
as beside the road or in front of the government office because it can cause
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traffic
jam or
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accidents.
On the other hand
, we
also
can use moral approaches to make
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good driving habits.
Firstly
, the government can create a program that
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about the offences of driving. It could
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senior high school students because they are the younger generation that permitted to have
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driver
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license
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.
Secondly
, it would be a good way if there were a psychological test which measures the readiness of people to get their license. I think it will be beneficial to make sure that they have great self-management like stable emotions and high empathy for passing the roads.
Therefore
, I strongly believe that
traffic
accidents can
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if we combine the rules to give the
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driver punishments with the promotion of polite driving. Punishments can make them
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and emotional approaches will aware them about the safety driving.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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