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The graph shows the quantities of goods transported ini the uk between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport

The graph shows the quantities of goods transported ini the uk between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport
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The line chart shows the
number
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 of
goods
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 delivered in four different ways from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
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, the most used
tranport
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transport
 method was by road followed by
from
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apply
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water and by rail, and the least used way was by pipeline.
First,
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most of the
goods
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 that
transported
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were transported
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 were delivered by road. In 1974, about 70
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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 were transported by road, and the
number
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 kept growing steadily, in 2002, the figure hit around 95
million
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tones
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tonnes
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.
Second,
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the
goods
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 that
transport
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were transported
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 by water and rail were both about 40
million
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tones
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 in 1974, and in 1982 the
number
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 of
goods
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 delivered by water
grow
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grew
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 to about 58
million
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tones
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, but the figure dropped to around 50
million
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tones
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 in 1998,
then
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 rebound to 62
million
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tones
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 in 2002.
On the other hand
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, the
numer
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number
 of
goods
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 transported by rail dropped to 30
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1982, and the
number
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 kept fluctuating in
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the folling
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folling
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following
 years, and the
number
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 came to 40 40
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
Lastly
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, the
goods
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 transported by pipeline had the lowest
number
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in
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of
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 all transportation
method
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methods
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. In 1974 the figure
of
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for
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 the
good
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goods
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 transported by pipeline was about 5
million
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tones
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tonnes
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,
then
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 rose to around 25
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1982, after that, decreased to 20
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1994 and
maintain
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remained
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 the same
to
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until
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 2002.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, goods, million, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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