The bar chart shows the amount of ferign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019.

The bar chart shows the amount of ferign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019.
The chart provides information on the quantity of foreign direct investment in two Asian countries during a period of 6 years.
Overall
, China has received the most amount of investment,
meanwhile
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India has had the lowest sums of investment by foreigners during the period of time studied. On the one hand, China has stayed relatively stable fluctuating from around 80
million
to 50
million
dollars during the first four years (2014 to 2017),
then
peaking at an astounding 110
million
in 2018 and
finally
decreasing unbelievably to 50
million
in the year 2019.
On the other hand
, the quantity invested in India
has
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oscillated from about 25
million
during
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2014,
then
it
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peaked, circling at 65
million
at
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in the year 2017 where it plateaued at around the same values
2018
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, afterwards varying between 60
million
and 30
million
until eventually decreasing moderately to around 30
million
in 2019.
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