The bar chart shows the amount of ferign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019.

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The chart provides information on the quantity of foreign direct investment in two Asian countries during a period of 6 years.

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, China has received the most amount of investment,

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India has had the lowest sums of investment by foreigners during the period of time studied. On the one hand, China has stayed relatively stable fluctuating from around 80

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to 50

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dollars during the first four years (2014 to 2017),

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peaking at an astounding 110

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in 2018 and

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decreasing unbelievably to 50

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in the year 2019.

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, the quantity invested in India

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oscillated from about 25

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2014,

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peaked, circling at 65

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in the year 2017 where it plateaued at around the same values

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, afterwards varying between 60

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and 30

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until eventually decreasing moderately to around 30

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in 2019.

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The bar chart shows the amount of ferign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to 2019.

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In modern era, it is easy to sell, buy and work with other people through internet. But others against it. Do you think this is positive trend or negative trend.

You were recently disrespected by one of the employees at your local supermarket, Write a letter to the supermarket manager. In your letter ●tell him/her why you were speaking with the employee ●describe the employee's rude behaviour ●explain what you'd like the manager to do

More and more people are working from home rather than at the workplace. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, But others think it will bring stressto the home. Discuss both views and give your opinion.