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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time period.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time period.
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The
grafs
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graphs
 provide information on borrowed
books
 from four libraries in four different
month
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months
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 in 2014
,
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apply
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 and illustrate the percentage of
types
 of
book
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books
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 that were borrowed over
this
 time. Between the
month
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months
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June
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of June
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 and August, borrowed
books
 in Sutton Wood dropped from 250 at the beginning of the period to 100 in August. Despite the past reduction, the graph shows
increasing
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an increase
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 in borrowing
books
 by approximately 200 in September compared to August indication.
Although
, West Eaton and Church Mount had almost the same amounts of
books
. Regarding the borrowed
types
 of
book
 in 2014, fiction
were
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 the main part, controlling more than
two-fifth
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two-fifths
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. Fiction had the largest proportion of
types
 of
book
 over
this
 time showing 43%, followed by biography (10%) and self-helf (19%).
In contrast
, history and science had the same
percent
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per cent
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.
Overall
, the number of
books
 borrowed from libraries illustrated different growings, not including the two
types
 of
book
 collection, with the majority of
types
 of
book
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books
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 that were borrowed. In the past,
however
, borrowing
books
 indicated individual changes.
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