The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.

The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents 

percentage of borrowed books' genre.
The line graph provides us with information about
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of
books
that were rented from various libraries from
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June
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june
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to
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september
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2014
while
the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed
books
' genre.
Overall
, the number of borrowed
books
had
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and fiction was the most popular type among readers.
According to
the graph, the highest number of
books
given away was in Ryeslip and in the second place we see Sutten Wood with 250
books
that were rented.
In addition
, West Eaton and Church Mount dispatched 50
books
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june
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. Despite the low rating, both had
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150
books
in September. Getting back to the details, it is obvious to see fiction's popularity with 43%. Biography was
choosen
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chosen
by 19% of people
while
history and science were behind
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a small proportion.
Furthermore
, it is interesting to note that
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lagged wildly and was
choosen
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chosen
by a minority of readers.
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