The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.

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books

that were rented from various libraries from

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june

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2014

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and fiction was the most popular type among readers.

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books

given away was in Ryeslip and in the second place we see Sutten Wood with 250

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, West Eaton and Church Mount dispatched 50

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june

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. Despite the low rating, both had

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150

books

in September. Getting back to the details, it is obvious to see fiction's popularity with 43%. Biography was

choosen

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by 19% of people

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history and science were behind

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a small proportion.

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lagged wildly and was

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chosen

by a minority of readers.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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