The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.
The line graph provides us with information about
number
of Add an article
the number
a number
books
that were rented from various libraries from Change the capitalization
June
june
to Change the capitalization
June
Change the capitalization
September
september
2014 Change the capitalization
September
while
the pie chart presents
percentage of borrowed books
' genre.
Overall
, the number of borrowed books
had a dramatic changes
and fiction was the most popular type among readers.
Correct the article-noun agreement
a dramatic change
dramatic changes
According to
the graph, the highest number of books
given away was in Ryeslip and in the second place we see Sutten Wood with 250 books
that were rented. In addition
,
West Eaton and Church Mount dispatched 50 books
fro
Correct your spelling
from
june
. Despite the low rating, both had Change the capitalization
June
a
great growth Correct article usage
apply
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
reached
Wrong verb form
reaching
to
150 Change preposition
apply
books
in September.
Getting back to the details, it is obvious to see fiction's popularity with 43%. Biography was choosen
by 19% of people Correct your spelling
chosen
while
history and science were behind for
a small proportion. Change preposition
by
Furthermore
, it is interesting to note that self help
lagged wildly and was Add a hyphen
self-help
choosen
by a minority of readers.Correct your spelling
chosen
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