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The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.

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The amount of
books
 checked out from four libraries in the months of June, July, August, and
September
 of 2014 is displayed on the line graph. The proportion statistics of the various categories of
books
 borrowed
is
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 displayed in a pie chart. All things considered, it is evident that the libraries in Rye Slip and Sutton Wood checked out most
books
 over the specified time frame. June had the largest number of book loans from Rye Slip
Library
 (300
books
), followed by Sutton Wood
Library
 (250
books
) in the same month. The amount of
books
 checked out from the Rye Slip
Librarylibrary
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Library
 drastically decreased during the course of the following three months. Actually,
this
library
 only had about 175 volumes checked out in
September
. In July, the Sutton Wood
library
 had 275 volumes checked out;
however
, in August that number dropped precipitously to just 100. In
September
,
however
,
this
library
 had the most
borrowings
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 (300
books
). The
quantity
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 of
books
 checked out from Church Mount and West Eaton libraries increased steadily over the specified time frame. In June, they each lent just fifty bo West Eaton saw a higher increase in
borrowings
 than Church Mount did during the course of the following three months. But they both lent 150
books
 in
September
. Regarding book genres, fiction accounted for 43% of the total
books
 borrowed. Biographies made
for
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 19% of all
borrowings
 and were the second most popular category. 38% of the
borrowings
 were made up of history (14%), science (14%), and self-help (10%) combined.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, september, library, borrowings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "displayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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