Write about the following topic: Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that
hobbies
are essential for mental health.
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some
people
believe that
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spending
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amount of
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their
hobbies
will
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affect
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individual
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individuals
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and society, others argue that
this
is the completely personal
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. In
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I will explain my support for the latter view. The personal choice is paramount.
The
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people
should have the right to decide
thir
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their
life
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lives
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based on their
interest
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interests
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and
passion
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passions
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. Diversity of
people
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socity
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society
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has
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is exist
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is existed
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from
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since
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the
stone age
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. and
people
who
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have
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different opinion should be protected.
For instance
, the famous
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scientist
Thomas Alwa Edison stated his experiment as a hobby, he
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time
for
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to
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his
hobbies
rather than studies. later he
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obtained more than
2500
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2,500
patents,
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without
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a higher education. There is common
that
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the
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people
spent more
time
for
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on
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their
hobbies
especillay
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especially
younger
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the younger
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generation which not going to impact
on
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their personal or social life.
Moreover
, that will make them
expert
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experts
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in
thier
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their
hobbies
. The
people
who like to paint, obviously
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more
time
to create
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creating
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their best work.
For example
, Van Goak spent months
for
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his
hobbies
which
is given
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gave
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him an insight
for
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into
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the
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painting. His
faimous
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famous
painting The Skull was drawn in the classroom. In conclusion, The
people
should have the right to
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thier
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their
time
for
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on
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any kind of external intervention. Spending more
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for
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hobbies
will make
expert
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them expert
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to
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that skill and It will help to improve their personal and social life.
Hobbies
should be
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considered
as personal.
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