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The line chart shows the trends of employment in the USA and predictions to the future.

The line chart shows the trends of employment in the USA and predictions to the future.
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The line graph illustrates the movement of employees into different different sectors in the USA from 1995 to now, and the estimation of the data until the near future of 2025.
Overall
, the manufacturing
sector
 exhibited a fluctuation throughout the period and it will continue its fluctuation until the period.
While
 cultivation demonstrated a downward trend, the service
sector
 showed the opposite.
Moreover
, both fields are estimated to
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 their own trends. The percentage of agriculture employees
were
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 80% between 1975 and 1977 before declining to around 40% from 1977 to 1980. Its noticeable decrease continued constantly, and it
predicted
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 to be roughly 10% in 2025. 1980 was the milestone of employment changes. The agriculture
sector
 replaced other counterparts as the dominant field until now. Its exponential increase started from nearly 10% at the beginning of the period,
thefore
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therefore
, it will be expected to reach
the
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90% of employees in 2025. The
remainin
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remaining
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 working field showed a similar trend
of
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 agriculture between 1975 and 1980.
This
sector
 increased its size from 10% to a peak of 40%. After 1980, it
receeding
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receding
 to its 1975 level in
early
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 2000s.
Therefore
, it will continue to
decrese
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decrease
 in the near future.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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