The line chart shows the trends of employment in the USA and predictions to the future.

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The line graph illustrates the movement of employees into different different sectors in the USA from 1995 to now, and the estimation of the data until the near future of 2025.

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, the manufacturing

sector

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exhibited a fluctuation throughout the period and it will continue its fluctuation until the period.

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cultivation demonstrated a downward trend, the service

sector

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showed the opposite.

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, both fields are estimated to

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their own trends. The percentage of agriculture employees

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80% between 1975 and 1977 before declining to around 40% from 1977 to 1980. Its noticeable decrease continued constantly, and it

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to be roughly 10% in 2025. 1980 was the milestone of employment changes. The agriculture

sector

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replaced other counterparts as the dominant field until now. Its exponential increase started from nearly 10% at the beginning of the period,

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therefore

, it will be expected to reach

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90% of employees in 2025. The

remainin

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remaining

remainin'

working field showed a similar trend

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agriculture between 1975 and 1980.

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sector

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increased its size from 10% to a peak of 40%. After 1980, it

receeding

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receding

to its 1975 level in

early

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2000s.

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, it will continue to

decrese

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decrease

in the near future.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

199 words

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